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Post  Andyyyy on Fri Apr 01, 2011 11:19 am

I wrote this a year ago. It's extremely personal, and I haven't showed it to anyone, but I read something in OOC that made me want to post it. Besides the meaning, it's kind of crap. I never was good at poetry. >.<
She needs an escape,
she needs to be free.
Even if it's all in her mind,
she's going to flee.

Away from this world,
away from it's hells.
Away from it's heavens,
away from where such beauty dwells.

"It's the best thing I can do,
times are tough."
Yes but as true as this is,
it can get more rough.

No clue where she's going,
not one piece of sense left.
She hugs the gun closer,
about to perform the perfect theft.

It'll take all her troubles,
just for a small price.
Her life will be gone,
her body motionless; cold as ice.

The gun raises higher,
her hands starts to shake.
Nervous, oh how nervous,
she's about to break.

Tears start to form,
then trickle down her cheeks.
She can't do it, can't go through,
for her mind starts to speak.

How stupid, how foolish,
you're leaving so soon!
Not a day over fifteen,
and you've become such a loon.

The world may be ugly,
it may carry a heavy weight.
But deep down, there's beauty,
and what about your fate?

You don't know what lies out there,
after you perish and wither.
There's no telling what you will face,
it could be great, but could be bitter.

And with this, the gun went down,
went back on her lap.
The tears fell more freely,
and her worries were relaxed.

Never again did she touch the gun,
never looked in it's way.
Her mind was set, her future clear.
Times can be hard, but it's only a small price we pay.

To live can be hard,
but death is no prize.
Look closer, look harder.
Just open your eyes.
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Post  Eden(: on Sat Apr 02, 2011 12:00 am

That's really good. (:

I like it. I like the message. <3
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Post  Andyyyy on Sat Apr 02, 2011 12:27 am

Oh wow, thanks. It means a lot! c:
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Post  Eden(: on Sat Apr 02, 2011 12:31 am

Just stating the truth! :DD
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Post  Fennec on Mon Apr 04, 2011 4:19 am

Nice =)

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Post  Sauske. on Mon Apr 04, 2011 10:10 am

This is really good. (:
Way better than anything I could have wrote. I suck at poetry. Haha.
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Post  Andyyyy on Mon Apr 04, 2011 11:59 pm

Oh wow, thanks everyone. c:
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Post  ♡ Alicia ♡ on Wed Apr 06, 2011 12:17 am

This is amazing!
It's really in depth and wel written.
Good job :]

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Post  Andyyyy on Tue Apr 12, 2011 7:18 am

Thank ya! C:
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